It's really interesting. May I make some proof-reading-type comments?
p.1 in Summary, "data" is treated as a countable (plural) noun, but at the bottom of p.2, it is treated as a mass (singular) noun. See also uses on p.3 and p.9 (in the latter, both usages occur in the same sentence!).
p.1 in Introduction, why is "Endangered" capitalized but "critically endangered" not? (Perhaps this is veterinary convention.)
p.2 third line from bottom: extraneous "the" in "owned the by the".
p.3 in the first paragraph, the long sentence describing the three rhinoceroses considered could possibly use a couple of semi-colons to separate the different individuals' descriptions, for ease of understanding.
pp.5 and 6 at bottom: the headings of the tables on the following pages seem to have become detached from the tables themselves, and appear below the page number. Similarly, at the bottom of p.8, the heading of table 4 appears under the page number (and refers apparently to the _preceding_ table, unlike your other table headings, but like your figure headings).
p.7 "Ta-ble" split over two lines.
p.10 in paragraph 3, two "even"s in "even patchily even then". Also a rather odd (to my eyes) usage of "painful" in "painful animals" apparently meaning "animals in pain" rather than "animals causing pain" (perhaps this is also veterinary usage that I'm unfamiliar with).
p.11 last sentence of main text: missing word(s) in "the potential the species as a whole". Likewise, in Acknowledgements, missing "to thank" (presumably) in "I would like Dr Fred..."
p.1 in Summary, "data" is treated as a countable (plural) noun, but at the bottom of p.2, it is treated as a mass (singular) noun. See also uses on p.3 and p.9 (in the latter, both usages occur in the same sentence!).
Bah, I hate data (the word, that is)! The Grauniads' style guide suggests that using it as a mass noun is now usual, so I've standardised on that. But yes, I do always get it wrong...
Another proofreadingy comment: on p6, the fifth entry in the table mentions "chronic lameneness". Presumably just "lameness" would have been sufficient. (Unless the additional "ne" makes it last long enough to be chronic :-)
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p.1 in Summary, "data" is treated as a countable (plural) noun, but at the bottom of p.2, it is treated as a mass (singular) noun. See also uses on p.3 and p.9 (in the latter, both usages occur in the same sentence!).
p.1 in Introduction, why is "Endangered" capitalized but "critically endangered" not? (Perhaps this is veterinary convention.)
p.2 third line from bottom: extraneous "the" in "owned the by the".
p.3 in the first paragraph, the long sentence describing the three rhinoceroses considered could possibly use a couple of semi-colons to separate the different individuals' descriptions, for ease of understanding.
pp.5 and 6 at bottom: the headings of the tables on the following pages seem to have become detached from the tables themselves, and appear below the page number. Similarly, at the bottom of p.8, the heading of table 4 appears under the page number (and refers apparently to the _preceding_ table, unlike your other table headings, but like your figure headings).
p.7 "Ta-ble" split over two lines.
p.10 in paragraph 3, two "even"s in "even patchily even then". Also a rather odd (to my eyes) usage of "painful" in "painful animals" apparently meaning "animals in pain" rather than "animals causing pain" (perhaps this is also veterinary usage that I'm unfamiliar with).
p.11 last sentence of main text: missing word(s) in "the potential the species as a whole". Likewise, in Acknowledgements, missing "to thank" (presumably) in "I would like Dr Fred..."
Hope this helps. Best of luck with it!
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I should have capitalised Critically Endangered too (that's usage taken from the IUCN)
As to painful animals; yes it is a veterinary idiom, but the OED seems to think it's a fair use of the word :)
I've incorporated most of the other changes (except for the ones that need l33t LaTeX skills, which I'll get some help with)...
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Bah, I hate data (the word, that is)! The Grauniads' style guide suggests that using it as a mass noun is now usual, so I've standardised on that. But yes, I do always get it wrong...
[bah, why can't you edit comments?]
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