Matthew's Journal

It's really interesting. May I make some proof-reading-type comments?

p.1 in Summary, "data" is treated as a countable (plural) noun, but at the bottom of p.2, it is treated as a mass (singular) noun. See also uses on p.3 and p.9 (in the latter, both usages occur in the same sentence!).

p.1 in Introduction, why is "Endangered" capitalized but "critically endangered" not? (Perhaps this is veterinary convention.)

p.2 third line from bottom: extraneous "the" in "owned the by the".

p.3 in the first paragraph, the long sentence describing the three rhinoceroses considered could possibly use a couple of semi-colons to separate the different individuals' descriptions, for ease of understanding.

pp.5 and 6 at bottom: the headings of the tables on the following pages seem to have become detached from the tables themselves, and appear below the page number. Similarly, at the bottom of p.8, the heading of table 4 appears under the page number (and refers apparently to the _preceding_ table, unlike your other table headings, but like your figure headings).

p.7 "Ta-ble" split over two lines.

p.10 in paragraph 3, two "even"s in "even patchily even then". Also a rather odd (to my eyes) usage of "painful" in "painful animals" apparently meaning "animals in pain" rather than "animals causing pain" (perhaps this is also veterinary usage that I'm unfamiliar with).

p.11 last sentence of main text: missing word(s) in "the potential the species as a whole". Likewise, in Acknowledgements, missing "to thank" (presumably) in "I would like Dr Fred..."

Hope this helps. Best of luck with it!